use the ideas in the document plus your new ideas to make this document a 6 page… is like you are revising the paper… the student says it is a revision..,

teachers comments: Over all the paper was missing a lot of detail… Also, page 3 information need to be taken out.  the teacher feels that ages and locations are not important to the argument.

MLA formating

Direct quoits 

strong argument

argue both sides of the question

a good hook/intro

paragraph 2 (Context) needs definitions of "deployments" and "divorce"