How would this story be different if it were called "Boy" and written from a father to a son? Try rewriting it that way and keep it about the same length as the original story. Keep it in one stream-of-conscience paragraph the way the original story is written. The story is constructed that way to show the thoughts of the daughter, the memories she has of her mother throwing these lessons out all throughout the daughter's childhood. The daughter may even be upset remembering it all since it comes out in one long blast the way it does. Keep yours together that way, but you can decide the tone or mood of the piece. Also be sure to have one phrase that repeats a few times (no more or less than 3 times) like the "slut" line.