I cited several things wrong….below are the teacher comments
There are a few major issues, however. In the first place, the paper is not organized as a Position Paper so much as a report on both the history of feminism and a few specific feminists who are celebrities. The prompt options were for you to take a position for or against either celebrity feminism or hashtag feminism, so unfortunately, the first six paragraphs are not necessary and are not on the topic, even though, again, they show serious research. In the paragraphs after that, the paper does read as though you are in favor of celebrity feminism, but it doesn’t state this anywhere, which it’s required to do in the prompt and rubric – it is essentially missing both a thesis statement and a counter-argument, where you explain what the other side (against celebrity feminism) would say and why that ultimately is a less persuasive / valuable viewpoint.
Another issue is that many of the sentences are plagiarized, because they are nearly exact quotes that do not have quotation marks around them. Because you have been so careful with citations, it’s clear that you intended to credit the original writers, and that’s good; however, the crediting is on a slipperly slope given the number of slightly reworded / paraphrased sentences. These are not done properly and in most situations this would count as plagiarism and earn a zero for the whole paper. A sentence like “Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie is a resilient, stern, and impenitent feminist; reformist-feminist” is nearly word-for-word taken from the Nwosu source and is too far away from the Nwosu citation – this is not acceptable. It would need to say:
As the scholar Charles Nwosu has written, “Chimamanda….[fill in rest of exact quote]” (2019).
There are a few major issues, however. In the first place, the paper is not organized as a Position Paper so much as a report on both the history of feminism and a few specific feminists who are celebrities. The prompt options were for you to take a position for or against either celebrity feminism or hashtag feminism, so unfortunately, the first six paragraphs are not necessary and are not on the topic, even though, again, they show serious research. In the paragraphs after that, the paper does read as though you are in favor of celebrity feminism, but it doesn’t state this anywhere, which it’s required to do in the prompt and rubric – it is essentially missing both a thesis statement and a counter-argument, where you explain what the other side (against celebrity feminism) would say and why that ultimately is a less persuasive / valuable viewpoint.
Another issue is that many of the sentences are plagiarized, because they are nearly exact quotes that do not have quotation marks around them. Because you have been so careful with citations, it’s clear that you intended to credit the original writers, and that’s good; however, the crediting is on a slipperly slope given the number of slightly reworded / paraphrased sentences. These are not done properly and in most situations this would count as plagiarism and earn a zero for the whole paper. A sentence like “Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie is a resilient, stern, and impenitent feminist; reformist-feminist” is nearly word-for-word taken from the Nwosu source and is too far away from the Nwosu citation – this is not acceptable. It would need to say:
As the scholar Charles Nwosu has written, “Chimamanda….[fill in rest of exact quote]” (2019).