15 Aug Depression among university student
You do a great job in your draft describing the various aspects of depression for students. However, there’s not a strong argument yet. Instead, this draft is more of an informative research paper rather than an argumentative one.
What is your position on the matter? Are schools not doing enough? What specifically can they do better? Review the chart and determine which specific problem you want to argue can be solved with one of these solutions.
After addressing the above concern, take some time to look at your paragraphs and make sure they always connect back to your thesis. I highly encourage you to use the TRIAC paragraph structure linked in the Week 4 module.
