31 Aug Fairytales and disability
Where Im finding the difficulty in your draft is what exactly is your thesis. You make a really intriguing statement in your introductory paragraph or at least one of your opening paragraphs where you connect fairy tales with stories of accommodation. What Im wondering is, is this your thesis or part of your thesis. Then theres other parts of your argument that make me think that you are arguing that disabilities in themselves can be define d as fairy tales, which is also extremely intriguing. If this is your argument, my advice for revision is why is that so? How are disabilities fairy tales? What are fairy tales? I think answering that question would be the second part of your thesis. Are fairy tales stories of accomdation? Is this part of your definition? If so, how does this discussion of accommodation fit into your other paragraphs. However, if you were trying to discuss how prevalent disabilities are within fairy tales themselves, my suggestion would be to go through your examples and discuss specific fairy tales that have the presence of the disabilities youve mentioned, such as blindness in Rapunzel or aging in Snowdrop. Your paragraphs are all very interesting and you discuss the role of social construction of disabilities extremely well. I think now you just need to show how all of these paragraphs are unified, how they work together to prove your main argument, which I think you could do most successfully through revision to have a more clear, arguable thesis.
